A few centuries ago, there was a little poor boy named Tommy
who lived in a little town on the coast of Ireland. One sunny morning, Tommy
was skipping to school on the stone pathway when he thought he heard a whisper.
He looked around, and found nothing but the brick wall to his right. He
proceeded to skip to school when he came across a boulder the size of a wagon wheel in the
middle of the stone pathway. Tommy took the same path every day for the past three years and had never seen this boulder before.
Curious yet
hesitant, Tommy carefully tiptoed around the boulder to find a little twinkling
fairy hiding behind it. The fairy’s long hair was platinum blonde and almost
covered her ocean blue dress, which was the same color as her eyes. Tommy was
about to say something when the fairy reached up and put a finger to his lips.
“Shhhhhh.
Be quiet. I am trying to hear something,” she said. Tommy was incredibly
confused at this point. All of a sudden, Tommy heard a faint whisper that said,
“Now is the time.”
“Wait… you
are the chosen one?” the fairy asked. Tommy was still confused.
“I have
absolutely no idea what you are talking about,” Tommy replied.
“Well, I was
waiting to hear from the wind fairy. That whisper you just heard was the wind
fairy, telling me who the chosen one is,” the fairy said.
“The chosen
one? What does that even mean? I don’t even know who you are!” Tommy said.
“My name is
Ophelia. Let me explain,” Ophelia replied. She then told him that she had been
looking for the chosen one for about a year. The chosen one was the child who
could turn seashells into gold so that the fairies could all be freed from the giants.
“But why am
I the chosen one?” Tommy asked.
“Because
the wind fairy told me so. And she knows everything. Now we just have to find
some shells for you…” Ophelia said as she started fluttering away. Tommy
quickly followed her, assuming she was heading towards the shore.
Sure
enough, Ophelia was in fact headed towards the shore. Once they arrived at the
beach, Tommy could feel the cool sand underneath his feet. Ophelia picked up a
few seashells and placed them in Tommy’s right hand.
“What am I
supposed to do with these?” Tommy asked.
“Um… I am
not entirely sure. Just try concentrating really hard. Maybe think of a really
happy memory – your happiest memory,” Ophelia said.
Tommy
furrowed his brow and thought about the moment when he learned how to tie his
shoes. Within a matter of seconds, the small seashells in his hand turned into
little pebbles of gold.
“YOU DID
IT! Now we can save the other fairies from the giants!” Ophelia exclaimed. Over the next few
days, Ophelia gathered enough seashells to turn into gold to finally save all
of the fairies. To thank Tommy for all of his help, she gave him a little kiss
on his cheek and he immediately blushed.
From that
point on, whenever Tommy needed help or guidance, all of the fairies were happy
to help and look after him.
Bibliography: "Tommy Pritchard" from Welsh Fairy-Tales and Other Stories by Peter H. Emerson; link to the reading online
I have never read the original story before, but from reading your authors note I like the spin that you added to the story. It kind of reminds me of the Golden touch but Tommy can control what turns into gold and what doesn't. I like the fact that you added he used his powers to save fairies. That is such a creative twist I never would have thought of it. I really enjoyed your story and can't wait to read more of your stories.
ReplyDeleteHi Kaitlin! You are an awesome writer. I love how vivid you made the entire story. It was a really enjoyable and light read. I had never heard of this story before, but your author’s note was helpful! I think you did an awesome job describing the original story, but also putting a twist on it. I can't wait to read more of your work!
ReplyDeleteHey, this was definitely a great story to read. You have a special way of writing that makes the reader very captivated. I found the story very cute and I know see Tommy as a real fairy tale hero. Like I said the writing was perfect and although I have never heard of this story before, I was really into it. Thanks for sharing and I look forward to your future stories.
ReplyDeleteI feel like I’ve ended up reading so many stories over the past couple of weeks about people who reveal and then lose the source of their newfound gold, so your twist on it was definitely refreshing. It was great to read your author’s note and see how much you ended up adding to this; I liked seeing more emphasis on the fairies’ side of the story, instead of the focus always being on the human’s issues. Very nice!
ReplyDeleteYour story sounds so magical with having a chosen one and meeting a fairy. I felt the emotions Tommy felt. I was glad that the fairies continued to help Tommy in the future. Reading that there was a shore that Tommy walked by often, I was surprised that he did not realize his special powers earlier. However, I understand why he would not realize them because even I do not think of my happiest memory when I hold a seashell. As I continued reading, I wondered how turning sea shells to gold would help the fairies. I wondered if the fairies were taken hostage and selling the gold seashells would free them.
ReplyDeleteThis story is very cute and I really love the very beginning of it. I was, however, disappointed with the ending. It seemed to wrap up too soon and just when it was getting to the most important bit. I wanted to know just what she needed those gold pieces for and why the fairies were trapped and why he was chosen. I felt that you spent time on the one section I wasn't super interested in which was him finding out that he could turn shells into gold. I think that this story would be really cool if it was the beginning of a couple stories that told us just what happened with the fairies and the giants and the gold but as is it feels very unfinished.
ReplyDeleteIt's also significantly different from your source material. I think that's really cool especially since you added so many of your own twists to the story I think what you came up with is really creative. I also wasn't exactly sure what a cockle shell was so I think that it was a very good idea to add a picture of them for your readers.
Well, this story seems pretty different than the original, but I think you did a really good job making it your own. Instead of rewriting the same story with a different ending, you took a source story as inspiration and wrote something completely new. I love to see things like this because it reminds me of improv comedy, how something new can spark out of something just barely related.
ReplyDeleteI like your story as is, but I have a few questions / things I would like to know more about in this world you've created. For one, what exactly did the giants want to achieve by imprisoning the fairies? If it had to do with their magical powers, what exactly were the fairies capable of and how did they fall victim to the giants? What is so special about shells that when one is turned to gold, a fairy is freed from a giant's clutches? I know those are a lot of questions, but if you could add maybe just a line or two about this background, it would make Tommy's feat a lot more impressive to me as the reader.
Anyway, great work on this story!